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11-22-2014, 03:06 PM
(This post was last modified: 09-01-2022, 01:03 AM by Fearless Community.
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Looks good, but I recommend you read through and fix up the grammar mistakes, as there's quite a few capitalised words that are totally unndeeded.
EG. "Mr Irons was In his" - Incorrect use of a capital.
"drink In which", - Incorrect use of a capital.
"Evocity for a reason, That reason" - No capital needed after a comma.
"ATLAS Corporation, Mitchells served" - A full stop is needed, not a comma.
"presentation, We hope" - Incorrect use of a capital after a comma.
"This Is the first" - Incorrect use of a capital I.
"futures better, We've decided" - Needing a full stop, not a comma.
This wasn't made to insult your intelligence, just to give you a hand, as the grammar lets down the post.
Good luck.
EG. "Mr Irons was In his" - Incorrect use of a capital.
"drink In which", - Incorrect use of a capital.
"Evocity for a reason, That reason" - No capital needed after a comma.
"ATLAS Corporation, Mitchells served" - A full stop is needed, not a comma.
"presentation, We hope" - Incorrect use of a capital after a comma.
"This Is the first" - Incorrect use of a capital I.
"futures better, We've decided" - Needing a full stop, not a comma.
This wasn't made to insult your intelligence, just to give you a hand, as the grammar lets down the post.
Good luck.
Kind Regards,
Wood.
Wood.