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+---- Thread: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - CHAP 4 RELEASED (/showthread.php?tid=18528)
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - York - 09-11-2012
hm nice
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - Adman - 09-12-2012
Damnit, I'm already dead! xD
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - equal - 09-12-2012
It will probably end up with me being promotd to Police Commander because I bust the Family and Adam Jensen for the murder of you.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - Faustie - 09-12-2012
Here's a little throw-in for you: Me and DerStorm had a chat, and I'm currently writing the next chapter. See how that plays out.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - equal - 09-12-2012
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Inb4, Adam Jensen pulling out some high-fi cyber unrealistic physco weapons.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - Crownguard - 09-12-2012
1 of the best threads so far, SO EPIC,
Cant wait for 3rd chapter.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - Faustie - 09-12-2012
Chap 3 out guys, hope you enjoy.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - CHAP 3 RELEASED - equal - 09-12-2012
Very nice..
I really like chapter 3, this is actually the first book ever I am going to read completely.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - CHAP 3 RELEASED - Adman - 09-12-2012
Loving it so far. Keep up the great work.
RE: The tale of EvoCity or the ballad of the Father - CHAP 3 RELEASED - User 5190 - 09-15-2012
Quote:“Gentlemen, ladies, my children, “But there is a few complications with it, our normal supplier of firearms have been rendered unable to smuggle his weapons here. The police took him in a night raid. We will have to use a local supplier instead, I have already made contact with a person that have been recommended to me”.
Usually, a Italian crime family would never involve women or small children, even if they were in the family. I know that you didn't say how old the children were but my statement on the women still remains the same.
I like the story, seems you put alot of work into it, I probably read it just because you wanted to write about La Cosa Nostra and I was fairly interested in what you had to write, I saw a error in the first chapter where you put: “ Don’t worry, he will come. He won’t miss his hour of glory” so there was a space between the " and the text, also I see that you really like to write about details as I saw in the second chapter, It wasn't bad but I would say a tad bit boring after little while, the start was exciting but when you switched roles it became a little.. Yeah.
I would give it a 8/10 for the great storytelling.